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Peer Review of Thesis Statement
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Current Forum: Peer Review: Thesis Statement
Date: Thu Feb 24 2005 4:58 pm
Author: Johnston, Lindi <ljohns15@towson.edu>
Subject: Lindi Johnston's Thesis Statement
 
Topic: Assistive technologies and Learning disabilities
Thesis: The purpose of this paper is to demonstrate that assistive technologies can provide beneficial aide and necessary assistance to students with learning disabilities.

Revised: The purpose of this research paper is to explore the various types of learning disabilities and demonstrate how assistive technology plays a beneficial role in aiding those students with learning disabilities through education.
 

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Current Forum: Peer Review: Thesis Statement
Date: Thu Feb 24 2005 5:06 pm
Author: Johnston, Lindi <ljohns15@towson.edu>
Subject: Lindi's peer review of Jeanine's thesis statement
 
 
Your thesis statement seems like a good approach to your topic. My only suggestion is that you clarify "for the different types of students in classes", to something more specific. For example you may want to say "students with varying abilities". But other than that I think you are on the right track, and I think that it is a good idea for your paper.
 

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Current Forum: Peer Review: Thesis Statement
Date: Sun Feb 27 2005 12:18 am
Author: Johnston, Lindi <ljohns15@towson.edu>
Subject: Lindi's peer review of Katie's thesis
 
 
I think that your thesis is very well organized and appropriate for your topic. Perhaps you may also want to examine if there are any disadvantages to having too much technology, where students depend on it too much. But anyways, I think that your paper will be very informative and interesting. Good Luck!
 

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Current Forum: Peer Review: Thesis Statement
Date: Mon Feb 28 2005 6:28 pm
Author: Rifkind, Irene <IRifki1@towson.edu>
Subject: Irene's Review of Lindi's Thesis
 
I think that your thesis statement is very well in the fact that it is precise and to the point and allows the reader to know exactly where you are headed with your research. Also, I have the same topic as you, so it seems we have a similiar interest!

Instead of saying 'assistive technologies' change it to assistive technology, because that already incorporates everything. Also, instead of using the word assistance again since it was already mentioned with technology you could mention a couple ways it is helpful,for example "assistive technology can provide beneficial aide, such as increasing the student's motivation...with learning disabilities."

Good Luck with the rest of your paper!! : )
 

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